逍遥右脑 2010-05-20 01:10
或许大家对英语写作都有一些抵触情绪，为什么呢？因为在我们的脑中已经构思好了, 可却不知如何体现在书面上？看了下面的内容, 希望对大家有些帮助！
作文主要看内容、结构、语言三个方面。
内容不跑题即可，注意：1.不要妄图以情动人；2.不要妄图在构思上出奇制胜。
结构上牢记总分总：先写主题句(Topic Sentence)，再写分论点，最后写总结句(Conclusion)。
语言最重要，往往使评分产生重大差异，语言要模仿和包装。
基本表达
人们认为：it is generally/ widely believed/ held/ agreed that
越来越：be increasingly + adj., be on the rise, the growing number of
万能理由（Omnipotence）
1. 方便：convenient/ convenience
2. 效率：efficient/ efficiently/ efficiency
3. 节省和浪费：save time/ money/ space; economical, thrift
waste time/ money/ space; costly, lavish
4. 人的心理健康：independent, cooperative, competitive,
considerate, confident, creative, sociable,
perseverance; selfish, isolated, conserative
5. 人的身体健康：health, disease, strong, strength, energetic
6. 娱乐：colorful, pleasure,joy, recreation, entertainmentm, relax
tired, boring, lonely
7. 环境：environment, pollute, poisonous, dirty
8. 安全和危险：safe, danger, risk
9. 经验：experience, social experience, enter the society
10. 人际：humane, fair, unfair, help, assist, freedom, freely
写完之后修改注意：（内容方面尽量不要修改）
1、字母大小写
2、怪符号
3、单词拼写
4、主谓一致
5、动词时态
6、名词单复数
实例一
题目：Bicycles――An Important Means of Transport in China提纲：（1）为什么自行车在中国这样普及（2）和汽车的比较（3）自行车在中国的前途
Score: 8
Bicycle is an important means of transport in China. The important reason of it is the economy of Chinese. The use of bicycle in China is widely because people in China have not high wage. They can only afford a bicycle, and they have no money to buy a car which is too expensive. So Chinese usually buy a bicycle, and use it to go to work, or go to travel and so on. The other reason is the large population of China. All these made the bicycle become the important means of transport.
The bicycle, compared to the car, is not too expensive and it is easy to learn and to use and it can save the surface of putting it. It doesn’t ask to build the garage like car. This point is very important to China, because of the lack of land. It isn’t too expensive, so Chinese can afford it. It doesn’t need any oil, and it can’t cause the polusion. All of these are the good needs compared to the car.
In the future, bicycle will be widely used. And it will be in good demand. People will produce much more modern bicycles.
Score: 14
Bicycles are very popular in China. Almost every family in the city has two or three bicycles. During the rush hour, you can see that thousands of people -- man and woman, old and young -- ride their bicycles to work and study. That is why China is called “the kingdom of bicycles”.
注：1. 第一句总写，第二句和第三句分写，最后总写。
2. During the rush hour 分词结构开头。
3. 破折号内容为同位语,句式多变化。
Compared with cars, bicycles are superior in many ways. First, they are cheap, convenient and easy to ride. Second, riding bicycle is good for health. Third, they bring no noise nor air pollution. Though cars are faster and more comfortable, they are too expensive. They consume plenty of oil and they pollute the air. Sometimes, it is difficult for a driver to park his car. Moreover they often cause traffic jams and accidents.
注：1. Compared with cars 分词结构开头。
2. be superior to/ be inferior to 优于/ 低于
3. thirst, second, third 英语语言有层次感，信号词
4. cheap 便宜，最好用inexpensive
5. be good for health 对健康有好处（万能理由）
6. Moreover 表示递进
In my opinion, the future of bicycle is very promising. Since China is a developing country and has a large population, I think, riding bicycle is appropriate to Chinese present conditions. It will be an important means of transportation for quite a long time.
注：promising 有前途的 a promising young man
Score: 11
There millions of bicycles in today’s China. Bicycles are very important means of transport in people’s daily lives. Because to ride a bicycle is very simple, to buy a bicycle will not cost so much money, to park a bicycle needs just a small room and to ride a bicycle does not need oil but the rider’s strength, bicycles are popular all over the world, especially in China.
注：第一句应该用there be结构